In celebration for the birthday of Ninapolitan,
myself and 75+ authors participated in a prompted one-shot story effort. I have
updated this new page on the site, so I hope you enjoy!
WARNING: CONTAINS ADULT CONTENT
Happy Birthday, Nina!
2 Responses
October 15th, 2009 at 9:47 am
Oh my gosh. I am struggling for words to show how great this was. And I’ve had long enough to think of some – LOL.
First of all, I love the concept for this. You were straight into the action. No info on what business took Edward away, or what Bella had been doing to keep herself occupied in his absence, just right in at the reunion. And I loved it. The other details may have distracted from the emotion and desperation of your characters.
As a reader, I felt like my own anticipation grew and heightened along with Bella’s as Edward teased and manipulated her body.
The emotion and passion you conveyed through this story was exceptional. I love this line – ““Shhh… I know, but I need to make you feel good first. I won’t last long,” he whispered, almost… sadly.”
Even though this is a short piece, I’m not left wanting with regards to the level of Bella and Edward’s connection to each other. His need to please her and put her needs first, him knowing that although she ‘wants’ him – he needs to touch her first.
Bella’s acceptance, albeit slightly reluctant, of his plea in turn gives him what he wants, without either party sounding selfish.
Edward’s loss of control was also beautifully written. There was a roughness to it that was sexy as hell, but at the same time he was relentless and sweet.
I really loved reading this piece – as I do with all of your writing – and I’m glad you took part in Nina’s birthday gift.
October 16th, 2009 at 8:37 am
I am such a fan of everything that you write and this is no different. This story was beautiful you really capture the desperation you feel when you’ve been away from your lover for far too long. I’m glad you all got together to do this for Nina.